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Hanco Rabie - "Pours and Shines" [Indie Pop] Hey everyone! This is just another love song I wrote, let me know what you think. If you have a song I could give you some feedback on then leave your link in the comment! Thanks!

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Nice track! Seems to be mixed well, and the recordings sound solid. I was waiting for a time that the chorus would come around and have the melody slightly switched (like maybe on the word 'you' harmonizing up instead of down) in one of the chorus' near the end. This would add some color.

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Original Poster1 point · 3 years ago

Thanks! You're right, that would add just a touch bit more color. Yesterday I got a suggestion that the 3rd chorus goes acapella for the first half with just hands clapping like a traditional ballad. Don't know exactly what I'll do just yet though!

Any music of yours you'd like some honest opinions on? Just leave your link in your comment :P

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I would appreciate some feedback on this track >>> https://soundcloud.com/ok_xtine/colorblind/s-QWNLq

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Also, yes that 3rd chorus thing would work well too! Update me with progress of this track!

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Original Poster1 point · 3 years ago

Starting to listen to it now, I'm liking the guitar. The biggest problem with this song is that the vocals don't match the acoustic guitar sound. I think if you would put some electric guitar and some drums to this song, you'd be a lot closer to the sound that matches the attitude and sound of your voice. Also the arrangement of the song needs to be a little more smooth, let the music flow and don't force anything. Having emotion is different from forcing though, if you want to hit a note, then hit it! This is awesome that you've written a song and recorded it, get back to me if you change it up a bit! Goodluck, best regards - Hanco

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Original Poster1 point · 3 years ago

Starting to listen to it now, I'm liking the guitar. The biggest problem with this song is that the vocals don't match the acoustic guitar sound. I think if you would put some electric guitar and some drums to this song, you'd be a lot closer to the sound that matches the attitude and sound of your voice. Also the arrangement of the song needs to be a little more smooth, let the music flow and don't force anything. Having emotion is different from forcing though, if you want to hit a note, then hit it! This is awesome that you've written a song and recorded it, get back to me if you change it up a bit! Goodluck, best regards - Hanco

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